Friday, September 11, 2015
Dream Threads
The sky was really green for some reason, and I had a friend there, but I can't remember who. We where walking down a street at night, and the sky reminded me of the deep green you would see if you where flying over the ocean. As we where walking we heard people coming up behind us saying, "On your right". We pulled off to the side and saw there tons of people rolling by. Some of them where on skateboards, some of them where on bikes, and some of them where in roller blades. After they passed a man came behind them carrying a bike on his back and came up to us. He asked were we where traveling to. Even though we did not answer a portal appeared and my friend left. I was going through the very detailed, psychedelic purple portal.
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Great comparison: "the sky reminded me of the deep green you would see if you were flying over the ocean."
ReplyDeleteI really want to know what happens to your characters after they go through the portal! I enjoyed how you used color to describe the dream- “the sky reminded me of the deep green you would see if you were flying over the ocean." I thought that really made me feel like I was with you in the dream. I also liked how you had dialogue in the story and how the dream felt like as the character was explaining, he was also explaining himself. Great job Riley!
ReplyDeleteGood morning, Riley,
ReplyDeleteThis was an interesting story, and I enjoyed reading it. You placed colors where they shouldn't "belong" and used them to your advantage, crafting a unique world and story. I wish I knew what happened afterwards.
Have a lovely night,
Zachary